Electric Tangerine

I'll talk about her with you ANY DAY! Mad Girl's Love Song is one of my all time favorite poems! Yes she's depressing, and yes she killed herself, but that ...

I love the first 5 lines, but then you have as i walk i can hear lots of sounds in there...This feels very out of character with the rest of ...

Ok here goes. First...I'm not sure I completely understand this cause its the end to a story I haven't read but that aside...I highly suggest you get a spell checker. ...

I can't decide about this one. It's a very interesting style. You may have done this purposefully and I'm sure to hear you read it would clear up some of ...

Silence of the world surrounds Beating pulsing like a heart Organs falling landing softly Breaking the silence once and for all Echoes wringing, pounding headache Covered ears throughout the earthquak

Thanks for your advice...I'm taking part of you suggestion for the last stanza for sure. *runs off to edit*

-EDITED- In the deepest of filth, beneath laundry lines on a fog soaked day in November, A slip of a girl, no more to be seen disappeared from the streets ...

I really like your imagery, a lot. You have a way of seeing things in a unique light that I find very...well...poetic. I especially like how toward the end, your ...

I agree with Twit. It doesn't really read as a poem but more like a story. I love your creativity though, and I think the humor is perfect, as in ...

HI everybody, I'm new here, and I like writing. I mostly do poetry, but I'm thinking about working on other stuff too.